I used to take Japanese language module in NUS for a year. Despite the heavy workload, I must say I enjoyed it thoroughly. Taking up this course really makes me have a greater understanding about japanese culture and their people.
For this module, there are always alot of home assigments to hand in for every tutorial lesson and we have 3 tutorial lessons per week. We were always told to hand in our assignments at the start of the class and each assigment will be counted towards our final grade. When I just started on this module, there was once we need to hand in 2 assignments at the beginning of the class. For some reasons (I guess it slip my mind or something), I only hand in one assignment at the start of the class. When the class end and I start to pack and leave, I realised that my other assignment is still in my file.
When I went up to my tutor and handed her my assignment, I was told that I won't be graded for that particular assignment because she considered me as handing in late. Nevertheless, she will still mark it for me. I was dumbfounded for a moment as it was the first time I ever encountered such an incident. Initially I thought my tutor would accept my home assignment readily like my previous tutors. The same incident happened to my tutorial mates as well who were new to the module. They have forgetten to bring their assigments to class and as they stay in hostel, they promise to go back and get their assignments when the class end but the tutors also refuse to grade them.
From the above, I realise that Japanese really keep their word and are very particular about punctuality. Ever since then, I always make sure that I always bring all my assignments whenever I go for my japanese class and hand in my assignment ON TIME!!!! Haha..
Saturday, February 28, 2009
Monday, February 16, 2009
Critique my Business Letter critique
Dear Mummies,
As part of our Letterland focus on Eddie Elephant, we will be making a trip to the Singapore Zoo to see the elephants! As this is the last field trip for the year, we would like to invite the parents to join us.
Details as follows:
Date/Day: 6th Nov/Thur
Time: 8.30am to 2.15pm
Venue: Singapore Zoo
Cost: $15 (child) / $21(adult)
Attire: Uniform
Do note that the cost per person includes zoo admission, tram ride, a snack and transport charges. Please make confirm attendance and payment by Wednesday 5th Nov. As I will be off tomorrow, do make payment to either Lao Shi or Shirley. However, should you need more details about the trip, please either email or call me.
For parents who are Friend of the Zoo, admission charge of $4.50/child or $9/parent is not applicable. If you would like to make your way there, do also let me know by Tuesday.
Feedback for week 6 & 7 will be emailed to you on Tuesday, do let me know if you don't receive it by Tuesday night. Also, please note that 7th November, Friday is a schoolholiday. School resumes on 10th November,Monday.
Thank you & regards,
Shareen Ng
Principal
RightStart Kindergarten
Tumble Tots (S) Pte Ltd
2 Sembawang Crescent
#02-02, The Jelutung Community Club
S(757632)
Tel: 72570109
____________________________________
My Critique
Firstly, I think that the letter should address to 'parents' instead of just 'mummies'. Moreovee the letter should start off with a subject heading like 'Field Trip to the Zoo' to give the reader a rough idea of the purpose of this letter.
On the whole, the tone of the letter is pretty informal and the some of the sentence structure is not quite correct. Instead of 'Please make confirm attendance and payment by', it can be change to 'Please confirm your attendance and make payment by' which sounds more appropriate.
The letter ended with a note about the sending the feedbacks of the child via email and the schedule of the new school term. This is a side track from the initial purpose of the letter which is to inform the parents about the trip to the zoo. I feel this second issue should be address in another letter with a proper subject heading as it will make the letter look more formal and professional.
When ending off, 'Thank you & regards' cannot go together. I feel the principal should end off with 'Thank you' in the final statment and 'With Regard' when signing off.
As part of our Letterland focus on Eddie Elephant, we will be making a trip to the Singapore Zoo to see the elephants! As this is the last field trip for the year, we would like to invite the parents to join us.
Details as follows:
Date/Day: 6th Nov/Thur
Time: 8.30am to 2.15pm
Venue: Singapore Zoo
Cost: $15 (child) / $21(adult)
Attire: Uniform
Do note that the cost per person includes zoo admission, tram ride, a snack and transport charges. Please make confirm attendance and payment by Wednesday 5th Nov. As I will be off tomorrow, do make payment to either Lao Shi or Shirley. However, should you need more details about the trip, please either email or call me.
For parents who are Friend of the Zoo, admission charge of $4.50/child or $9/parent is not applicable. If you would like to make your way there, do also let me know by Tuesday.
Feedback for week 6 & 7 will be emailed to you on Tuesday, do let me know if you don't receive it by Tuesday night. Also, please note that 7th November, Friday is a schoolholiday. School resumes on 10th November,Monday.
Thank you & regards,
Shareen Ng
Principal
RightStart Kindergarten
Tumble Tots (S) Pte Ltd
2 Sembawang Crescent
#02-02, The Jelutung Community Club
S(757632)
Tel: 72570109
____________________________________
My Critique
Firstly, I think that the letter should address to 'parents' instead of just 'mummies'. Moreovee the letter should start off with a subject heading like 'Field Trip to the Zoo' to give the reader a rough idea of the purpose of this letter.
On the whole, the tone of the letter is pretty informal and the some of the sentence structure is not quite correct. Instead of 'Please make confirm attendance and payment by', it can be change to 'Please confirm your attendance and make payment by' which sounds more appropriate.
The letter ended with a note about the sending the feedbacks of the child via email and the schedule of the new school term. This is a side track from the initial purpose of the letter which is to inform the parents about the trip to the zoo. I feel this second issue should be address in another letter with a proper subject heading as it will make the letter look more formal and professional.
When ending off, 'Thank you & regards' cannot go together. I feel the principal should end off with 'Thank you' in the final statment and 'With Regard' when signing off.
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